Her father and brother took it surprisingly well when she dropped out of university, bringing me home with her. I was 24.
We painted her bedroom ceiling red, badly. On our backs, it was a canopy of crimson clouds.
Her brother moved out; when we had guests, we stayed in his old room. The rain kept time against the skylight.
Later, I left under a different kind of cloud. Her father chased the van down the drive; I owed him money.
All I took away was my clothes, my teddy bear, and the memory of the rain on that skylight.
[Suggested by Philip.]
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Most times I'm content with just reading these and appreciating them as they are - small, brilliantly formed pieces of writing.
But this time, even though it is indeed great, I want to know more.
This was really great, and incidentally enough, my area just calmed down from a large storm.
I like it.
Hummm...a teddy bear? There's more to this story.
Yes. I want to know more too. Very enigmatic. I liked it.
I want to know more, too!
Wow. That was beautiful and strangely powerful. I loved it. Especially the line- 'canopy of crimson clouds.' Lovely. You have such a way with words, i am consistently amazed. :)
Please - come to my classroom and show my pupils how to write like this. Just perfect!
Loving and hating this post. Love it because it's perfect and inspiring, hate it because it leaves me aching for more. Can you blame us then for itching to chase you down the driveway ourselves?
this is about you? you had to drive away from a mad Daddy? that sounds bad- I like skylights very much, they keep you awake but it's like sleeping under the stars
Yes, this one's about me. I still haven't got round to writing any fiction. It was a strange time in my life and not one I have written about in any other blog posts really. And, for now at least, I think this is all on it you're going to get.
I think, though, that it's a compliment that some of you wished this one had been longer. I do have a sneaking worry that many people read my longer posts wishing they were shorter.
It's lovely to get feedback on the 100 Word posts. I know it must be tricky, writing a comment on something so small, but I do appreciate it. If any of you guys fancy trying the 100 Word format do let me know.
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